'Colton's Big Night' by Origems Productions

(North Yorkshire, UK) Second Edit

The Film was shot on a Canon 6OD with 35, 50, 85mm lens. Camille Sainsbury Aka Puss in Boots. Director, dreamer. Alex Woocock- DOP Aka Handyman, techno whizzkid. Alex Williams- sweet-toothed maverick with a penchant for comedy.

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Comments: 1
  • #1

    Holly Atkins (Wednesday, 05 December 2012 12:49)

    The interpretaion of the script for a British audience works very well. A hugely engaging performance from Alex as Colton; almost arthouse for me.
    Keen to see more from the team.

'Colton's Big Night' by Origems Productions

(North Yorkshire, UK) First Edit

First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers

  • Film feels empty die to lack of foley
  • Music needs some work as it’s a bit patchy
  • Cut the bit with him bouncing on bed, not needed
  • Work on dialogue mix
  • Music too loud
  • Trim, trim and trim – keep it short
Comments: 17 (Discussion closed)
  • #1

    Adolf El Assal (Sunday, 04 November 2012 16:55)

    nice acting and photography. work on the sound mix / grading and cut a bit the beginning, it's way too long.

  • #2

    Catherine (Monday, 05 November 2012 13:37)

    This has more of a documentary feel to me - particularly the beginning. Sound/Music/dialogue could do with some work to tie it together a bit more. But I like the look!

  • #3

    Mark (Monday, 05 November 2012 18:38)

    Really frothy version, plays a bit like an MTV version but does need tying together with a re edit, great Colton actor (my fave of the ones so far) mix of pre teen stares and childishness linked with moments of schoolboy crush. As with the others be good to see how a shortened version works, some foley definitely needed and quieten then music down, great fun again though!

  • #4

    Shawy (Monday, 05 November 2012 20:12)

    My favorite interpretation of this story. The young actor does really well in bringing out the cheeky and cocky confidence of a boy obviously excited about his first date/crush...Well done all.

  • #5

    Foxy (Monday, 05 November 2012 21:38)

    A remarkable short film with strong use of the Canon/technology available. Script is strong and the actors, particularly the young lad, make the script really come to life. Well Done!

  • #6

    Mark P (Monday, 05 November 2012 23:18)

    Hi, Well done on getting it in. It started really well but lost its way for me. I think the kid playing Colton is great and I loved him in the opening, but things started to drag when the boyfriend came on the scene. I also really liked the line 'he's my boyfriend but you're my valentine' - it sums up the essence of what I see the film to be about. Perhaps that line didn't do it for you, but I still think you could perhaps try and bring out that tension a bit more in the edit. More reactions. A bit faster paced.

    Generally a bit more chopping could really make it much more compelling. I agree with the previous comments about sound and music. But great casting and a nice feel. Well done.

  • #7

    Jo (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 13:42)

    All the enthusiasm and fun for film making really shines through. The young actor in particular engages the watcher with his charisma and confidence - he plays the part with real natural charm. All very enjoyable and dead cool in its delivery.....

  • #8

    Nathan Gower (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 14:11)

    Camille and team, thanks for taking on the script! I love your casting, and I think the energy and humor on the front end are fantastic. On the back end, if Jackson was to be such a jerk to Colt (which was not my interpretation, but a perfectly valid one and one that works well for your brash Colton), I wish Anna would hav defended him a bit. I also feel that the resolution in the script is Anna relegatin Jackson to "just a boyfriend", and Colton as her Valentine. If the lines don't work for you, I wonder if there is a way to re-edit the end to give some space between the forehead kiss and Colton's mouth kiss. As it is, the brilliant front end of the film feels unresolved to me.

    Really fantastic work, and I'm so proud of what you guys were able to do with the script.

  • #9

    Stephen Cooper (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 17:31)

    Enjoyed the performances but feel some of it was lost to a bad dialogue mix. The levels need sorting on most of the dialogue through-out. I enjoyed the beginning, is a lot of fun, but wonder how much it truly adds to the story. Feel with the sound mix sorted and the film trimmed down a bit you'd have an overal better version.

  • #10

    Emma (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 12:15)

    The character seems a bit too old and the boyfriend quite defensive making it less of an innocent crush than interpreted by the other film crews. Agree with Nathan that some crucial plot points were missed. Anna needed to be more sympathetic.

  • #11

    Vincey (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 16:46)

    Enjoyable short film with good camera work and an excellent performance from all, especially young Alex Williams.

  • #12

    Shaun Bond (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 17:03)

    That kid is awesome. My feedback would be reiterating what has already been said, the beginning needs to be cut into something much quicker paced and the audio throughout needs adjusting.

  • #13

    Mark Williams (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 20:41)

    Shaun Bond where do I send the christmas card and cheque to? (Alex is ma boy!) I kno my view is biased but I felt he was just the right age and attitude for Colton, too young or too old and the crush didn't seem right, but at that awkward pre teen age, with a mix of childishness and attitude, plus finally triumphant, I feel works well. Plus he loved playing Colton, though he did apologies the first three times he tried the kiss. Weirdly he apologised to me. Looking forward to the edit, the first part really captures childish energy and exuberance, then the pre teen awkward, mixed with a failed put down to the boyfriend, to almost a sense of impending failure, that becomes a success. Great fun to make, glad people are enjoying!

  • #14

    Nadia (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 23:44)

    Hi didn't feel this worked as well compared to what was written on the script. The actor who played Colt was good and you were interested in him, but felt that it was rushed towards the end and the boyfriend a complete waste of space, whereas this is not what I picked when reading the script.

  • #15

    Emma T (Monday, 12 November 2012 20:53)

    Loved it!
    Thought Colton was great, just the right age to have a crush on the babysitter and a pathetic hope of more!
    I'd like to have seen a bit more of the prepatation - setting up the picnic - and the cooking bit was a bit too unrealistic for me.
    This one gets my vote!

  • #16

    Paula W (Monday, 12 November 2012 22:34)

    I thought it was great! A funny & enjoyable short film. Alex was fantastic really played the part well!

  • #17

    Mike (Thursday, 15 November 2012 15:10)

    Mixed effort, really like the opening sequence although the music is slightly overpowering, great presence for the kid playing Colton, but can probably cut a third of the sequence out, dim the music up the foley. Boyfriends arrival flattens things, and long pauses. Edit, can more be made of the kiss? Love the final wink to camera well done but edit it down, make more of the second half and could be a winner as engaging Colton.