'Enough' by Jaro Slava

(Czech Republic & Ireland) First Edit

We are Director-DP-Editor Jaroslava, who comes from the Czech Republic, Production Manager-AD Colette, sound recordist Mark, and camera assistant David, all from Ireland. Our actors are Barry, George and Grania, and this short film was shot in Blessington, Kildare, Ireland. We shot on Canon 5D Mark II over one day a week before the deadline. Enjoy and please leave a comment.

Read 'Enough' HERE

First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers

  • Find a dynamic atmos – there is too much absolute silence
  • Trim down opening shots

First Cut Comments... have YOUR say!

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Comments: 4
  • #1

    Stephen Cooper (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 22:56)

    Love the framing on the last shot of him. Feel thats the shot to finish on. Would agree with the production notes that you can trim the opening shot (Personally I'd suggest losing them altogether and start on the shot of the 'couple' from behind. After all, it is their story.

    Also felt that the whole film lacked a vibe. Really need to bring in a sound mix because at the moment the silences makes the film feel longer than it is.

  • #2

    Evan (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 23:40)

    Very nice filmic loom. Cinematography is top notch. I didn't feel either performance was strong. Certainly the acoustic void detracted from the visuals. Any ambiance would help: a distant creek, the wind rustling leaves, muffled party sounds. You have a good start here.

  • #3

    Michael W. Penny (Thursday, 15 November 2012 01:29)

    Agree that there is too much "empty space" where you have little happening sound wise. The solution could be to fill it with BG's, or it could be to trim shots. I'm not sure, you'll have to see what works.

    I also wasn't clear about the younger gentleman... At first, I liked how you were taking this story and making it about older people (where I and likely many others read this script as 20-something's), but I didn't understand the "husband" part. What's with the wings? Is he Cupid bringing her to get back to her husband-to-be, and he gave the older gentleman the evil eye stare because he was interfering in his work? Or is he the intended husband like in the original story? Sorry, that just wasn't clear to me as the wings threw me off.

  • #4

    Jaroslava (Wednesday, 21 November 2012 12:12)

    Thank you for the comments, gentlemen. Much appreciated.
    Michael: I understand that the "husband" part of the short is unclear. The young man in white is an angel taking Leila to her afterlife. More could have been done to make that clearer. Working on it.