'Enough' by Olivia Faire

(London, UK) Second Edit

London based film director. A one shot, filmed on the Canon 550D. Starring the talented Pip Willett and Leo Hatton with Jamie Hirsch, Francesca Newton, George Millar, Bella Franks, Daniel Tookey and last but not least Alexandra Dudley. Huge thanks must also go to Malcolm Crowthers for sound and additional Photography.

Read 'Enough' HERE

First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers

  • Music mixed too high
  • Music also a bit dreary, try something contemporary

First Cut Comments... have YOUR say!

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Comments: 7
  • #1

    Stephen Cooper (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 18:23)

    I'm a sucker for a one shot so enjoyed that aspect. The audio needs a fair bit of work, especially at the beginning and I think the ending is very abrupt. Feel whatever tension or emotion is built up by that point is instantly lost. Not sure how much you can do about that, but her being whisked away so quickly doesn't work for me. Maybe with the audio sorted it will play a bit better towards the end. Also don't think you need to linger on him for so long at the end. That said I enjoyed the style and performances of the film.

  • #2

    Felicity G (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 21:11)

    um. Found lack of eye contact between the actors off-putting and therefore found it hard to get involved.

  • #3

    Mark (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 12:21)

    To convey emotion you need good recorded vocals. You gave away the fact she was getting married and spoiled the husband to be's surprise entrance. Why Black and White? Why music that emphasised despair? I would put the colour back in Rescue the sound and change the music to something less sad. Maybe think about a reshoot and get coverage so you have choices that enhance the actors ability.

  • #4

    Claire C (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 20:45)

    I have to agree with Mark. I think the script won for a reason, it is beautifully understated and some of the altered dialogue you put in says too much. Also you spelt the writers name wrong, something you might want to fix.

  • #5

    Rocko Paolo (Friday, 09 November 2012 14:32)

    I love single shot but that being said it also makes editing a real challenge. It does run too long and the music is definitely depressing. I would love to have seen some color and I also agree that Leila is taken away too quickly. Her performance is stellar.

  • #6

    Simmerj (Friday, 09 November 2012 21:59)

    Why has the script been played with? This has lost all impact by being so didactic? Never take your audience for fools especially as there are other versions here that show the script works as is. Odd.

  • #7

    Michael W. Penny (Thursday, 15 November 2012 01:19)

    I watched this once. Then read all the feedback. Then watched it again, then again a third time to confirm my thoughts.

    I actually like a lot of what you did with this:

    - I too enjoyed the style of this film. I thought the performances were pretty good, especially a lot of the woman's work. I liked the black and white aspect, and enjoyed how you held on him at the end as he's contemplating his lost chance in life.

    - While I did find the ending sequence abrupt, I'm not sure I dislike that move... His last moments with this woman are right here in front of him. And like that, poof. she's gone, and he's alone.

    - I too am a sucker for the one-shot, as it lets the actors act, as opposed to cutting around them with coverage. The only thing I didn't like about this aspect was when you got in for their CU (~01:48), the on-board light on the camera really blew out her face and dropped his into too much shadow. It's just at this point where I realize it's an on-board light on a camera and that took me out for a second.

    - I had no problem with the lack of eye contact. In fact, I think it played wonderfully to the awkwardness of the situation. She can't look at him because of the position he's putting her in, and he can't look at her because he's embarrassed by what he had to do to free himself of this secret. Works REALLY well for me.

    - I enjoy the music you used. This "retelling" of the original script feels like he's the protagonist as opposed to this being a dual-protag story, and thus with it being "his" film, the music works for the lost hope he's been holding in for so long. It's now out in the open. And she's rejected him. He's so close but so far, etc. I think the music plays well to HIS state of mind and the direction you took this story.

    - For sound issues I'll agree with others here. Shooting beside a bus stop was perhaps a poor decision, but it is what it is now. It'll be next to impossible to ADR this, and frankly you get so close to them that ADR'ing the whole thing will probably just look bad. But if you only did one line, go back and cover her last line of "It is". It's off screen, you don't see lip flaps, and I think you can get away with it. It's really the line that you need to hear to close the book on their relationship, and it's probably the weakest in terms of BG noises blocking the viewer from being able to hear it. I also like how you either added or enhanced the guy's sigh at the end, it felt "final" to me. Very alone.

    - I would agree that there are certain parts where you added dialogue were perhaps too on-the-nose, but it's a one-shot, so you're not cutting them now (unless you reshoot the whole film). You have to live with it.

    There was something about this piece that spoke to the sentimentalist in me, so I just wanted to let you know (sorry for the wall of text haha!).

    The opinions of the others here are completely valid for what worked or didn't work for them individually, so I don't want to suggest you discount their opinions in any way; But I wanted to say there were a lot of things I think that DID work for me personally here.