'Enough' by Puzzle Pictures

(London, UK) First Edit

London based filmmaker Maureen Hascoet teamed up with producer Anna Zalane to produce short film 'Enough', starring Natalia Tena (Harry Potter, Games of Throne), Simeon Willis and Brona C Titley - for the 50 Kisses competition.

50 Kisses blog entry HERE
Read 'Enough' HERE

First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers

  • Too long – trim head and tail
  • Sound needs work as dialogue is lost in places
  • Atmos feels heavy and oppressive
  • Consider ADR as dialogue is so lost in the live sound
  • Create a world beyond the shots – are they at a party? If so, let’s hear it.
  • Add foley too, it will make your actors feel even more real
  • Nicely played though.

 

First Cut Comments... have YOUR say!

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Comments: 22
  • #1

    Stephen Cooper (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 18:41)

    Think the audio mix needs a bit of work. Couldn't hear a lot of the dialogue at the beginning that well. Is probably a little long to. As nice as the opening and closing shots are I don't think they add anything to the story. That said it was all shot very well and the performances where good, just need to work on the sound mix.

  • #2

    Maureen (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 18:50)

    Thank you so much for commenting Stephen! Definitely taking the sound point on board!! x

  • #3

    john (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 22:27)

    was a bit dark for me personally and hard to hear parts... good camera work and good acting from all ...

  • #4

    John (Thursday, 08 November 2012 16:45)

    I didn't know your cameraman had parkinsons.

  • #5

    Manny (Thursday, 08 November 2012 18:05)

    OK, this is not only the best version of 'Enough' this is probably the best film I've seen submitted (and I've watched all available)

    have a tinker with sound and you are there.

    Congrats on producing a couple of great performances from a totally average script, one only has to watch the other versions to see how its not supposed to be done.

    Well done.

    And John with your parkinsons comment, you're a dick

  • #6

    Si H (Thursday, 08 November 2012 19:32)

    Performances pretty much perfect. The camera has some odd framing, cuttng half your head off, although I liked it being one shot.

  • #7

    Jessie R (Thursday, 08 November 2012 23:43)

    I really loved this film. I agree with the comments about sound/atmos. and the opening and closing shots dont add much to the story but the performances were terrific and really brought the characters to life and made the moment believable. However, I would maybe suggest allowing us to linger on Matt and Leila for just a second longer before being interrupted.

    Also, Manny, I'm pretty sure the script won the award for best screenplay so I think to say the script was "totally average" is a bit harsh and I'm sure the filmmakers who choose to do the script disagree but you are entitled to your opinion.
    Agree with your sentiment about the Parkinson's comment tho! Not exactly a constructive criticism!

  • #8

    Manny (Friday, 09 November 2012 00:02)

    this won an award for best screenplay??..........jesus christ

  • #9

    Kirsty McConnell (Friday, 09 November 2012 01:17)

    Well I guess you can't win them all, Manny. Sorry my writing wasn't to your taste :) glad you enjoyed the film,

  • #10

    Ross H (Friday, 09 November 2012 01:35)

    Clearly the subtleties of scriptwriting and the understanding of a difficult yet realistic situation have been lost on Manny. Tell me Manny, did you enter a script? I detect sour grapes! By far the best adaptation yet of a very good script. Agree with the sound comments, but the meat and gravy of a good film is there.

  • #11

    Maureen (Friday, 09 November 2012 01:47)

    Wow - Thank you guys. The main comment is about sound and we're definitely working on it. For the rest, I guess the only thing worse than bad press is no press... so at least we got you talking! ;0) x

  • #12

    Dan Price (Friday, 09 November 2012 03:30)

    Great entry.

    So... sound you're already getting on top of...

    Trim suggestions:
    For my taste, the pearls and coat-on feel a little "actor waiting for cue". You could start this film 27 seconds in and lose absolutely nothing. If you wanted to be brutal, you could kick off at 44 seconds and mostly just lose shoe leather.

    Similarly, you can get out at 3:42ish. There's nothing wrong with everything after that but you say everything you need to with the camera move back to him.

    Also you got away with a one-er. I'm insanely envious!

  • #13

    Digby Jenkinson (Friday, 09 November 2012 04:31)

    Stands up against mainstream tv any day. Nicely shot, great soundtrack, beautifully acted - a piece thats quirky and works - had me sat up trying to work it out - like secrets being whispered and then you get it. Bravo to all.

  • #14

    Si H (Friday, 09 November 2012 09:52)

    I liked the opening shot. I like the way it draws you into the scene - it's quite magical and dreamy.

    The problem is, the short is so good, the acting so great, the 'twist' at the end... well it's a twist at the end almost for the sake of it and nothing more. How does it add meaning?

  • #15

    Manny (Friday, 09 November 2012 12:40)

    yes Ross H, the subtleties of writing are clearly lost on me, and I don't have sour grapes, I have huge grapes which is what gives me the ability to say what most people just think.

    Also everything that Dan Price said in his comment as regards trimming is spot on, that guy sounds smart.

  • #16

    Jessie R (Friday, 09 November 2012 13:29)

    Manny like I said before, your entitled to your opinion but big grapes or not, I dont think a little dipolmacy would go a miss.

  • #17

    Suzanne Kendall (Saturday, 10 November 2012 17:11)

    Sad, compelling film. Sensitively shot. Liked the music very much.

  • #18

    Gail Jenkinson (Sunday, 11 November 2012 23:41)

    Really enjoyed the acting in this short, superb work from both actors.

  • #19

    Michael W. Penny (Thursday, 15 November 2012 01:44)

    Great entry. I agree with the sound issues, so no need to go into detail.

    I agree you could probably cut in around 35-40 seconds into the film and not lose anything story wise. The pearl shot is lovely, but 100% agree with Dan Price it looks like "actor waiting for cue" once she throws the coat on and starts walking.

    It's a one-shot (well done! I love oners, as they let the actors just act!) so there's nothing you can really do about cutting in the middle anyway. You run almost 4 mins here, so 40 seconds off the top will get you close to that ~3min mark if that's the goal.

    Nice film. Thanks for sharing.

  • #20

    Mark (Sunday, 18 November 2012 09:40)

    Beautiful film and the intimacy captured so well. I would lose the line are you truly happy It just felt to contrived when everything else was so right and you could easily cut to where her wife comes in. I would probably prefered the new partner to have been a man from my perspective I could emphasise more at losing to another man than a woman.
    Some of the background sound near the beginning needs toning down although the background noise and the handheld adds to the emotion later and me normally hating handheld. I would just tone it down in the beginning.
    Lovely film though with great lighting Acting cinematography so well done.

  • #21

    Bettina (Thursday, 22 November 2012 11:37)

    Soo beautiful, Janina !

  • #22

    James (Friday, 04 January 2013 11:34)

    Not sure about this short. It is very dark and has there been any effort to rectify this by taking on board earlier comments?