'First/Last' by DVM

Second Edit

This competition was of particular interest to the lead actors, Vincent Kerschbaum and Mylène Tissi, who wanted to act onscreen together. They went on finding Darshan Patel, a director from Wolverhampton whose last short film, Grey, was part of the Official Selection of the Edinburgh short film festival in 2012. Since the scene is static, Darshan worked closely with Tea Smart, the DoP, to push for a visual style and give the movie an identity by giving it texture and culture. The movie was shot on a Canon EOS 60D with a 16x9 aspect ratio.

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'First/Last' by DVM

First Edit

First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers

  • Too long, the first shots give this away – it’s just people walking, trim down
Comments: 5 (Discussion closed)
  • #1

    Adolf El Assal (Sunday, 04 November 2012 16:43)

    you can easily tighten this film. and get rid of all the dissolves.

  • #2

    Stephen Cooper (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 18:49)

    Really liked the look of the film. The opening, the clothes etc. Think you went for the sci-fi element well. The sound mix on the bridge needs a bit of work, the sound comes in and out a bit much and I think that some kind of music would help both the build up to, and the kiss itself. All in all it's pretty good, but I would lose the dissolves, I'm not alone in my hatred of them.

  • #3

    Mylene Tissi (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 20:35)

    Thanks so much for the reviews. We will def tighten, loose the dissolves and work on sound. Please let us know if any other notes.

  • #4

    Suvasis (Thursday, 08 November 2012 20:39)

    I liked the look and the acting in this much better than any of the other versions of the same script that I saw- much more real and passionate and a thought towards "future" fashions. I liked the fade out to uncertainty and darkness. Maybe the girl ought to stop for a second of shock and realization and check what's happening to her face in her compact - or at least feel her face with her hand...still very good though

  • #5

    Mylène (Thursday, 15 November 2012 17:40)

    Thanks a lot for your comment Suvasis. We didn't want to break the flow with a mirror but will look into the other takes we have as to try and make it more dramatic.