'Ghetto Punk Romance' by Quink Tattoo

First Edit

The crew for this was: James lloyd- Director, Matt Howey Nunn- Producer and Cinematographer, Rory Langdon- Down- Editor and Camera Man. Our stills were shot by Rebekah Heys.We shot on a 5D Mark ii on a steady cam. 

Read 'Ghetto Punk Romance' HERE

First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers

  • Consider ADRing the whole film – we know, whaoaaa! Loads of work, but may make a huge difference
  • If you do revoice, you can go to town on foley, SFX and changes in atmospheres to create more ‘jouney’.
  • Grading, picture lacks punch - pop culture subject feels like it wants bolder contrast and colour
  • Need a crashing door FX at end

First Cut Comments... have YOUR say!

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Comments: 7
  • #1

    Adolf El Assal (Sunday, 04 November 2012 17:00)

    good short, work on the sound and grading.

  • #2

    Evan (Sunday, 04 November 2012 22:03)

    I liked your pacing and the performances were pretty good. As a one-take concept I think you pulled it off. I'd agree that the dialogue is competing with your ambiance and ADR might be worth a try. I assume you boomed this? If so you may want to reshoot this with lapels. You may end up liking it more.

  • #3

    Mark (Monday, 05 November 2012 18:58)

    I found this quite engaging and filled it's two minutes well, yep the sound needs work, but good performances and nicely done

  • #4

    Stephen Cooper (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 19:44)

    Like it. Love the one shot, the only thing i would sugges is finding a different colour grade. Don't think the look suits the script at all. Maybe go for something with a bit more colour and pop to it. Overal enjoyed it.

  • #5

    Michael W. Penny (Thursday, 08 November 2012 23:04)

    Love how you went for this in the one-shot and the pace is kept up throughout. Really liked how that played.

    Agree the colouring isn't my favourite. I felt like I wanted the red phone booth to pop, and the world to feel more alive. It currently seems pretty washed out and gritty. I know that's the REAL lives of these characters, and that's perhaps what you were going for, but I'd just test out playing opposite their "real" lives (ie: criminals). It could play better with a richer colouring. The reveal that they're criminals only comes at the end, but the gritty feel right from the start just didn't sit with me. This is just my longer version of saying I agree with what Stephen Cooper and the Producers Notes say re: colouring.

    Finally, I really agree with the note about doing a bigger crash sound on the door kick in. It'll provide that kick (pun intended) at the end of the film that drives the final point home.

    Nice work!

  • #6

    Layla (Saturday, 10 November 2012 20:30)

    Oh, this was my favourite script but think this fell a little flat. The actors are great with the dialogue, but it's washed out by the sound of traffic. Reveal is given away far too soon, as Ruby puts on her balaclava. Fake out kiss moment isn't given any time at all. Definitely take the notes on the kick and add an alarm.

    Love the one camera shot and how you dealt with the script issues (guns / bank robbery - nice nod to the location). Tweaks done, it'll be grand

  • #7

    Staré (Wednesday, 28 November 2012 03:06)

    Wow, how sound can really make a good movie look bad!!! really, if i rate the images and acting as 10 out of 10, i would rate the sound as 1. And yes, the color doesnt fit in this genre...this feels like a period piece. i see more contrast. Please do something about the sound and color.