'Lonely Heart' by Anidoodle
Second Edit
An animated interpretation of the zombie love story written by Mark Jones, hand-drawn and animated using Adobe Flash, Premiere Pro and After Effects.
Read 'Lonely Heart' HERE
Second Cut Comments... have YOUR say!
'Lonely Heart' by Anidoodle
First Edit
First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers
- Nice execution
- Sound effects would help create a richer world
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#1
nice and sweet story. I would add some sound effects to get more tension.
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#2
Good fun. Really enjoyed it.
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#3
Love that you chose animation!
I was a little confused around 1:23. The close up of her eating his heart and then going into the 3 frames shown - where she is giving him back his heart - in the two frames on the left there is no heart/red seen so on first viewing I didn't even look to that side. On a second viewing I understood that she was reaching in to give it to him, but you can't see it until that third frame so it was a little confusing.
Also, in her close up at 1:23, her head is too similar to his (hair style and face) i wonder if you put a bow (not a headband like his original gf) if that would help distinguish that she is different in that closeup.
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#4
Grabs me when Joe picks up the rose and the heart munching. Bit more animation in the middle. Then the kiss and the walk into the sunrise are fine. Nice to see an animation. Good luck.
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#5
this was always one of my favorite scripts - great artistic choice here
if there is time to correct this, and I hope you do, because like the person above, I think there is both confusion in those middle frames and for me, you’re missing frames that tell the most critical part of the story, imho
in the script, the hot female zombie tastes, then spits out the heart, she leaves, then a dog comes up, sniffs, then rejects it too – you kind of do that with three frames, but both the humor and sadness of those events deserve more/clear frames – the audience laughing at this will create great UP moment
because another missing frame, a close up of the male zombie with sadness - then takes us from laughing to real sympathy – creates a DOWN moment
then the hero should hear the eating of his heart, turn and see the new female zombie and their eyes should meet in closeup – an UP moment
then it can conclude as you have it, except, I’d do a closeup on the arm tearing off at the end, as it’s a great gag that will get one final laugh
those are my quick impressions, good luck!
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#6
LOVED IT! Brilliant work. I hope it makes the film for a nice contrast. Sound effects are the finishing touch. Loved the scoring as well. Really well-polished. *****.
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#7
What a nice refreshing take on the story. Love the track you've chosen.
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Jim Leach (Tuesday, 04 December 2012 17:55)
I was interested to see what you'd do with the sound. Certainly a bit squelchy! Enjoyed.
James Baker (Wednesday, 12 December 2012 12:08)
Just popped back to see what changes you'd made. The foley does add a bit of atmosphere. Saw some of your earlier work on Vimeo, keep up the good work.
Tina (Tuesday, 12 February 2013 17:08)
What a refreshing take on a zombie theme. Well done.