'Love' by Grindstone Films

(Southampton, UK) Second Edit

This was shot on a hacked Panasonic GH2 on the London Underground. 

Read 'Love' HERE

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Comments: 2
  • #1

    Staré Yildirim (Tuesday, 04 December 2012 17:17)

    In my number 5 top list.

  • #2

    Evan Marlowe (Monday, 17 December 2012 20:38)

    Still outstanding. Especially hits a nerve after our recent school shootings here. Feels like the intro could be yet shorter but that's fine tuning.

'Love' by Grindstone Films

(Southampton, UK) First Edit

First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers

  • Bold location shoot – love it
  • Try without fades, may have great impact – also maybe have no sound over start – let us know we are in a strange world.
  • Try more work with sound in the carriage, maybe muting and breaking through at relevant moments. Get creative with the narrative through sound, its rare a film will allow you to have such control over the soundscape. Right now its all at the same level.
  • Can you play the first line on the little girl?
  • Try more foley too, feels a bit empty. Maybe all we hare at first is breaking and foley? His selfish world.
  • Cut to black sharply at the end – we can decide if he did it or not
Comments: 13 (Discussion closed)
  • #1

    Mark (Sunday, 04 November 2012 14:01)

    Wow Guerilla film making at it's best. Great acting too.

  • #2

    Phil Peel (Sunday, 04 November 2012 15:57)

    From the filmmaker. I realise my description of "Love" is a bit sparse.
    I should have said "A film made during a nerve-wracking day filming on the Underground, with a great crew, who also acted as bored passengers, as we trundled up and down the line. Every few minutes the whole of the compartment changed as we arrived at the next station. A continuity nightmare!
    Fabulous actors Holly Jacobson, Lula Suassuna and Melody Reynolds"

  • #3

    Adolf El Assal (Sunday, 04 November 2012 16:28)

    omg, amazing short! great tension from the beginning to the end!:-) great acting too!

  • #4

    Rob Burke (Sunday, 04 November 2012 19:01)

    Phil - Rob the writer here - I'm blown away by what you've done with the script. Hard to put into words exactly what it's like watching this film for the first time as the writer . . . thanks for taking a chance on this story and thank you for transforming my words into such a strong visual story.

    Really love all the actors you cast - very cool seeing the characters on the page come to life. I'm amazed at how close this is to what I visualized. Quick, frantic pacing coupled with a foreboding sense of danger.

    I also really liked how the ambient sounds you captured gave the film not only a nice linear feel - but also provided a very strong "soundtrack" - especially at the end - the rising sound of the train pulling away coupled with the decision the Man has to make worked very well.

    Obviously a little biased here since I wrote this - but the superlatives I'm putting out here are genuine - job very well done.

    If I were to offer any suggestions - it would be to take a look at the volume of the Little Girl when she first talks - seemed a bit high (granted I had the volume cranked WAY up on my TV).

    Also - and this again may be a function of listening to it too loud - but there's some sort of "click" at 3:19/3:20 and I'm wondering if that's intentional? Sounds like either it could be something hitting the mic or maybe it's supposed to be the Man pressing the button or turning off the detonator?

    All in all, very proud to have my name associated with this film.


    Rob Burke

  • #5

    Chas Wiseman (Sunday, 04 November 2012 21:33)

    Very effective, writing and directing. Moved

  • #6

    Stephen Cooper (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 20:37)

    Was very curious how any film maker would approach this script and I can see from above that the writer was very impressed. I completely agree with him. You've done a great job on what was no doubt a very good script but a tough one to film.

    Don't think you need to do to much with it. Amazing job. Glad to see such great film makers in my local area.

  • #7

    Emily Grey (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 15:29)

    I really enjoyed watching this film. I love the location and I thought the casting was great! The pacing of the film was good, but alike previous comments maybe more foley could be added to increase the tension.

  • #8

    Evan (Thursday, 08 November 2012 01:50)

    Thanks to Rob for writing this and grindstone for making it. I feel like the piece adds considerable depth to the competition as a whole. Other than a few technical points and some edits I wouldn't change it. I do think it would be better to get us to the exchange faster.
    This is one of those films that looks deceptively easy to pull off. I'm sure it wasn't.

  • #9

    J Nicols (Sunday, 11 November 2012 18:01)

    Liked this entry and lovely performances. However, when the guy leaves the train the train is travelling from right to left. Then in the next shot he is on the wrong platform and the train leaves from left to right and is going the way it just came from.

  • #10

    Phil Peel (Sunday, 11 November 2012 22:28)


    Thanks for the feedback. I agree from the camera view of him inside the train it is going right to left, but when he gets out he ..and the camera ...are facing back towards the train, so crossing the line of movement and it is now seen travelling left to right.

  • #11

    Michael Bierman (Monday, 12 November 2012 10:29)

    Really super work. Loved the ending. Work on the sound as advised. Super acting.

  • #12

    J Nicols (Monday, 12 November 2012 11:52)

    Hi Phil,

    The problem for me was that the guy exited the train on the left platform and the next shot he is on the right hand side platform and for me this jars.

  • #13

    Phil (Saturday, 01 December 2012 19:25)

    I've uploaded the second edit onto Vimeo. Should appear on this site soon. :-)