First Kiss by Dr Deveril

Young love never grows old.
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  • #1

    Aly Valentone (Monday, 23 July 2012 23:22)

    Very cute. And the switch over to the older couple at the end was seamless. But the characters are generic. Nothing about any of them is distinctive,e.g. no proper names even. More details about them would have helped.

  • #2

    Craig (Wednesday, 25 July 2012 19:17)

    As said above, didn't feel for the characters. Using 5 year old is good but would it make it hard to make would they be able to give a good preformence?