Goodness that was sad. Think 2500 people would be an underestimate if the pill worked that well! Really liked this script.
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Milethia(Friday, 27 July 2012 23:22)
Good concept. Original.
A minor thing, but you say - 'A man in his late twenties.' Really, you should name FREDDIE immediately, so something like - 'FREDDIE (late 20s).
You should also lay your montage out something like -
MONTAGE - (title of your montage)
-shot
-shot
END MONTAGE
Or BACK TO SCENE
#3
Chris Townsend(Thursday, 02 August 2012 23:24)
Cool guys, thanks for the feedback. It's actually an idea for a longer piece I have written and am hopefully filming later this year. It was a pretty huge thing to fit into 2 pages! Those small
alterations/feedback are most apprectiated :)
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Rachel McAdam (Friday, 27 July 2012 18:32)
Goodness that was sad. Think 2500 people would be an underestimate if the pill worked that well! Really liked this script.
Milethia (Friday, 27 July 2012 23:22)
Good concept. Original.
A minor thing, but you say - 'A man in his late twenties.' Really, you should name FREDDIE immediately, so something like - 'FREDDIE (late 20s).
You should also lay your montage out something like -
MONTAGE - (title of your montage)
-shot
-shot
END MONTAGE
Or BACK TO SCENE
Chris Townsend (Thursday, 02 August 2012 23:24)
Cool guys, thanks for the feedback. It's actually an idea for a longer piece I have written and am hopefully filming later this year. It was a pretty huge thing to fit into 2 pages! Those small alterations/feedback are most apprectiated :)