This is a different take on the valentine's theme. Written well. The twist is good at the end. I was wondering where the short was going - a little worried for the boy - but, phew!, all was
okay.
You do use CLOSE UP and POV, which should be avoided when writing a screenplay.
It's enough to write, for example -
AIRPORT TERMINALS
1, 2, 3
Perhaps the varied settings went against this advancing - if filmed by folk with little or no budget - but the concept is good.
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Milethia (Tuesday, 31 July 2012 21:58)
This is a different take on the valentine's theme. Written well. The twist is good at the end. I was wondering where the short was going - a little worried for the boy - but, phew!, all was okay.
You do use CLOSE UP and POV, which should be avoided when writing a screenplay.
It's enough to write, for example -
AIRPORT TERMINALS
1, 2, 3
Perhaps the varied settings went against this advancing - if filmed by folk with little or no budget - but the concept is good.
All the best.