The Newlyweds by Vicky Hinault

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A brides dream day arrives, only to be destroyed by a persistent figure from her past.
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  • #1

    Nigel Sheppard (Monday, 23 July 2012 11:39)

    A fair attempt, however just a suggestion would be to put more emphasis on the former relationship. There's no reason for anyone to suspect the former husband based on what we can see in the script.

  • #2

    Niki (Monday, 23 July 2012 22:27)

    This is a nice idea. But there's no mention of Valentine's Day. It felt like it could've done with more tension at the beginning. Also there's lots of dialogue, especially question/answers. Film is a really visual medium - more "show don't tell". But good effort and I liked the ending.

  • #3

    Vicky Hinault (Wednesday, 25 July 2012 09:41)

    Thanks for your comments guys, I already can see how it can be improved with your thoughts and with some hindsight! Thanks again