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• #1

  Stephen Cooper (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 16:51)

  Good effort. Like parts of it a lot, but there feels like there are to many dull spots. Think part of that is the sound differences on the transisions. Need to work on the mix and cut the edit a bit leaner as the lead actor is very passive in the advice scenes.

• #2

  Shaun Bond (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 17:18)

  Same as above, the audio between shots with the friend and the shots with the girl don't appear continuous. The background music cuts out when talking with the friend.
  Also, some of the shots are a bit jarring. Namely the opening shot where the girl looks towards the camera and is then suddenly sat down. Plus the friends are sat at a bar in the long shot and a table in the close up. I think these could be overlooked if the audio flowed throughout the scene, but there is only one way to find out..

• #3

  Mark (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 19:56)

  I didn't agree with the other comments I thought it was very well edited and shot. The only thing I would say is when he says I'm going to be myself at the end he should have at least said something Like Hi My names ___ Can I join you etc.

• #4

  King (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 03:03)

  The problem is that the "fantasy" or speculatve sequences look the same as the "reality" or here-and-now sequences. The audience needs visual clues to understand what is happening. Softer focus, tighter framing, maybe even speed dilation, but something. The actors could also convey much more by being different in each part, the guy for instance acting super exaggerated cocky and self assured in the fantasy moments, but shy and reserved when talking to his friend. His performance seemed rather monochrome. Might even help to have different costuming in the fantasy sequences, like the "James Bond" persona could be in a tuxedo. Anything to help the audience understand.