'Colton's Big Night' by Ekwiss

(Louisville, KY, USA) Second Edit

Read 'Colton's Big Night' HERE

Second Cut Comments... have YOUR say!

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Comments: 1
  • #1

    Shaun Bond (Tuesday, 27 November 2012 22:13)

    This is loads better and runs much more smoothly. The only thing I would suggest from here is some foley on that kiss, both kisses actually. Well done

'Colton's Big Night' by Ekwiss

(Louisville, KY, USA) First Edit

Susie Shircliff is the producer. Matthew Real is the director, and Herschel Zahnd is the DP. All three met on this project. The film was shot on a Canon t3i.

First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers

  • Love that you did it with a puppet.
  • Could be shorter, try taking stuff out and see if it still works?
  • Tracking shot at 55 seconds could be shorter for instance. We would drop the photo frame just before the door as it does not work and will make the film shorter too.
  • Try adding some foley effects as right now it feels acoustically empty and serves to highlight the post sync dubbing of the voices (check out the other Colton film by Team Sun Rock for excellent foley)
  • Music on the kiss gets too loud too fast

First Cut Comments... have YOUR say!

Comments: 11 (Discussion closed)
  • #1

    Adolf El Assal (Sunday, 04 November 2012 15:19)

    it's ok. I liked the fact that you used a puppet. I feel that the puppet's voice doesn't fit. Also sound-wise, I would add more sound effects.

  • #2

    50kisses (Sunday, 04 November 2012 18:34)

    Yep, again needs foley

  • #3

    Nathan Gower (Sunday, 04 November 2012 20:47)

    Susie and team, what a joy it is to see puppet Colton on the screen! Really enjoyed your take. I think absolutely that adding foley would help. Let's hear the squeak of the mirror, the opening/closing of the door, etc.

    Generally, I think the production notes above are very good, so I'll leave it at that.

  • #4

    Catherine (Monday, 05 November 2012 13:30)

    Yes - I love the puppet but we need more foley to feel he is more real! The lighting is a bit off in places for me. I'm not sure grading could help at all?

  • #5

    Mark (Monday, 05 November 2012 18:32)

    Great variation using the puppet, have I seen him in something else? (muppets take manhattan possibly?) As with the others be interesting to see how the shortened version holds together

  • #6

    Stephen Cooper (Monday, 05 November 2012 23:54)

    Is a nice quirky entry. Nathans script seems to be bringing that out in film makers.

    Think if you make a few cuts and tighten a few shots you've got a great entry here. Looking forward to the possible re-edit.

  • #7

    Shaun Bond (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 16:38)

    The ending had me laughing but leading up to that point was slow in places, it would definitely benefit from some tightening. I also agree with everyone else on the foley, it might feel a bit faster paced if there was always something to listen to as much as watch.

  • #8

    Susie (Saturday, 10 November 2012 16:35)

    Thanks for the feedback! We are diligently working on sound and tightening up the cuts. And should have a second cut ready for review by Tuesday!

  • #9

    Evan (Saturday, 10 November 2012 20:58)

    Cute short. Just to clarify is this a puppet you created and if not did you get copyright clearance?

  • #10

    Susie (Sunday, 11 November 2012 21:58)

    He is a specially designed puppet (designed by my sister two years ago as a gift for me). His clothes and bowtie are baby clothes from goodwill.

  • #11

    Judson Lake (Thursday, 15 November 2012 15:34)

    Good work. Nice spin on this.