'Don't' by Doc Wood Films
Second Edit
'When everything seems at its end, will you find a friend?'
Read 'Don't' HERE
Second Cut Comments... have YOUR say!
'Don't' by Doc Wood Films
First Edit
First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers
- Nice opening energy
- Couldn’t read ‘sorry’ clearly on note
- World, sound effects and atmos too subtle / music too loud
- Could be tighter
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#1
I liked the concept, best version posted so far...
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#2
the beginning is way too long and work on the sound design, it's a bit empty. but I like this version.
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#3
Great location! I love the shop. But yes - too protracted and think improved sound/music would add a lot. Lots of potential!
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#4
good music, little quiet but i like the build at the end. The shots are really great aswell. Good concept!
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#5
Apart from trimming it down a bit a really like it (Would suggest getting rid of some of the ball throwing shots. After the first two times we know whats happening). I think the empty sound fits the script. Like just the tender music playing, is somber and works well with the story. The acting is great, the shots nice. All round I really enjoyed (if thats the right word) your take on the script.
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#6
The sound was great and complimented the mood and tonality.It was quante and a subtle reminder of how lonely it can be on top of a roof. Less is more people! Well done
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#7
Both your actors nailed it. All those subtle gestures spoke volumes to me. As said above could use trimming particularly in the writing/wrapping/tossing shots. We understand the manner of communication early so no need to show more than is necessary. Really well done overall.
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#8
It's a great short film. Turned out great and can see where the director was taking the story. The writing on the notes should have been clearer & shown more as well as the actress expressions. She really captured the opening scene, strong acting. Strong acting by both actors.
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#9
BEST version of Don't posted thus far. Great concept.
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#10
Great ambiance, love the pacing and the acting. It's very enjoyable so far. However, the ending felt somewhat incomplete. He seems to be placated, but where's her conclusion? What happens to her?
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#11
Very interesting concept, great acting but hard to read writing on paper.Facial expressions bang on. Want to see outcome.
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#12
I loved the feel that this film creates. Loved the location and the opening sequence. But the film is a little long and I feel that some of the shots linger unnecessarily, but this is nothing that a little trimming cannot fix. I also feel that the ending doesn't tie up any of the conflict which was created throughout the film, but I suppose this is a matter of opinion, if you like a film to left open ended or not.
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#13
Rather enjoyed this. Audio set the mood and the shots captured all I needed to see. the ending left open helped me relate...wanting more.
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#14
Looks great, enjoyed the film but the words on the paper were blurry and went quickly. Had a hard time knowing what they were writing. Couldn't see the "X" on the paper at the end and felt as it ended abruptly.
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#15
maybe im watching it differently than everyone else as thought it took way to long to get going . Cant see why she picked up the tennis ball in the 1st place and why rip out the note sorry . And why she suddenly held up her hands as if she hit a invisible wall . And just incase anyone ask i have nothing to do with any of the films on here .
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#16
Everyone is entitled to their opinion, but see that IMH also commented on the other "Don't" film and if you failed to notice the tennis ball was in both versions; I assume it was a major part of the script as both films throw the ball between characters.
After watching both versions of "Don't" you can't really compare one the other as both directors made it their own. I thoroughly enjoyed both versions. Good job to all involved.
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Paul (Thursday, 06 December 2012 04:49)
Second Cut: Nice. However, I feel you could have left the opening length longer. It lead up to the character and why they were going onto the roof, now it feels rushed. The words on the paper are clearer and the ending with the X on the ball is an excellent twist.
I think this is an all around great film.
Eddie Saint-Jean (Friday, 07 June 2013 21:38)
Loving this. Best one I've watched so far. Its the simplicity and all things unspoken. No frills or effects at all. I can see this standing on it's own at a short film festival & possibly winning something.