'The Price of Romance' by Ikonic Films
(UK) Second Edit
We're a UK production company founded in 2012, and this was a chance to work with a couple of actors we'd wanted to for a long time, and to shoot in a single take. Shot on 550d with a 14mm lens in a friend's office block for minimal editing and maximum experimentation on the day.
First Cut Comments... have YOUR say!
'The Price of Romance' by Ikonic Films
(UK) First Edit
First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers
- Bold choice to do it in one shot – even thought its one shot, consider making cuts to tighten
- Don’t like the final music cue
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#1
Love the one shot idea. I think this could do with some colour grading work to make it better visually. What did you edit it on? Color Grading Central do some nice, simple tutorials for colour grading but a quick google search should help you work out how to colour grade on whatever software you used.
The images of champagne, flowers and chocolates obsured a little too much of the image for my tastes. Is there another part of the image you could put them on to retify this? Or maybe just make them a little smaller. Perhaps just the word and the beep would have the same effect?
The hearts before the flash are over the man as well, can you reposition them so they are more on the checkout assistant?
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#2
Not really my sort of film so can't offer to much more advice other than maybe look into the colour and play around with it and see what you can do.
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#3
I like the shot and use of lettering for items no this- I think it works much better than the other version. The end still seems a bit off - the guy comes across quite nerdy at the start (well acted!) but I feel that needs to get into the clinch by accident more?
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#4
Like many of the films in this competition, you can't tell what the film is about by just watching it. Generally I'd say that's not a good thing, but perhaps that's what the guy wants. Maybe the final feature requires 50 obscure shorts with ambiguous narrative.
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#5
Unfortunately, this one didn't work for me. I had read this script and thought it quirky and fun and this lacks that. Also if hadn't read the script I wouldn't have immediately thought of a super market counter. The single shot idea meant I could not connect with any of the characters. For me a film should foremost be about story and this one just does not do anything for me. A good effort for though.
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#6
Hmm... if you're not understanding what's going on then that's not good...
Was anyone else struggling to get the basic premise of the scanner becoming sentient?
It's a fine line between spelling it out literally and letting the performances do the talking.
Feedback gratefully received!
Cheers,
Ross -
#7
I did not have a problem getting what was going on - but I had read the script. Once we saw groceries going across the screen it was obvious.
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