'Unbearable' by Michael W. Penny
Second Edit
Michael W. Penny teamed up with colleagues from UNEZEYES Productions, Zanderwood Productions, and DocWood Films to produce "Unbearable" for the 50 Kisses competition. Shot on the Red Scarlett
camera, the production was filmed entirely on location in Toronto, Ontario, Canada. The team stayed together to film three other 50 Kisses films, including "Don't", "Priceless", and
"First/Last".
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Second Cut Comments... have YOUR say!
'Unbearable' by Michael W. Penny
First Edit
First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers
- Cut the fades and mixes, they reduce pace and reduce visual impact. Audiences will get passage of time.
- Try grading for a more specific look, it feels a little like it was right out of the camera. Desaturate, super saturate, vignette, choose a look and run with it.
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#1
I would work a bit on the grading and the sound mix. I felt that the ending was a bit too quick.
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#2
Happy ending - not as per the script, but well-crafted nevertheless. It's just struck me that the bears are like children, suffering the fallout from parents' mistakes. A sad ending reinforces the allegory. Happy ending lessens it - they are just bears.
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#3
I don't actually mind the happy ending. It is tragic when children/bears are pulled apart by the mistakes of their parents, however all the more reason to have find each other outside of the upsetting situation. A very interesting an appealing twist on the original script.
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#4
Like the pink bear's expression in this one! But I agree with Adolf about the grading, it could do with some work. Also - I feel the scene where the couple are manipulating the bears mid air goes on a little long and is perhaps too comical/obvious and so takes you out of the their story a bit? Perhaps just cutting it a bit could help? And agree the changed ending takes away from the drama...
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#5
I think i like it overal but it does feel like somthing is missing. Would agree that the colour needs some work. May help match the mood of the music with the picture more.
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#6
I liked this - the bears expressiveness beats some of the real actors elsewhere. Would maybe ramp up the argument for tension and in-bed tussling (show some skin?) to add a little interest (bears taking cover under sheets?). The ending remonded a bit of TOY STORY 3...
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