'Neil' by Marshall Film Productions
First Edit
Neil was a collective effort from Marshall Film Productions. It features actress Irene Christopher as Rita, Owen Marshall as Neil & was shot by Benjamin Jones. The film was shot using Canon's C300 HD camera and it was edited on Final Cut Pro. The Sound was mixed by National Film & Television School Graduate Jeet Thakrar.
Read 'Neil' HERE
First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers
- Loose ‘so should we’
- Loose the ‘beautiful’ and ‘told you to say lines’ too
- Could even be reduced to a single kiss.
- Nice sound design
- Loose stair well shot
- Loose Neil disappearing, he is not a hologram right?
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Mark (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 19:05)
I've had trouble understanding some of the Neil films but this one makes it clear from the actors behaviour. The white room tells me its set in the future. It's a shame about the ordinary stairwell. Also the end where he blinks out of existance made me think he was solid earlier and not a hologram. Liked the idea of using a computer screen.
Rob Burke (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 20:45)
I really liked this "Neil" submission - like Mark, the acting and the white room really show me what's going on. Favorite moment came at 1:35.
If I had any suggestions about trimming I would maybe think about cutting the line "So should we" at :25 - it's a line that hasn't worked for me in any of the Neil films and you wouldn't lose anything by not having it. Also, I wonder what the piece would look like if you got rid of the stairwell shot - cutting at 2:28 and going straight to 2:32?
Great job overall.
Stephen Cooper (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 21:21)
Nice to see a version of Neil that isn't 5mins plus. Think you've done a great job with it. Love the framing, the use of space, the room itself. All works for me.
Not sure about him disappearing at the end and I would definitely loose the staircase shot, but other than that its really really good.
Emily Grey (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 15:17)
I enjoyed watching this short film. I like the futuristic white room and that the character Neil was played slightly robotic, therefore the audience can understand Neil's world is a computer one straight away.
Matt Jamie (Sunday, 11 November 2012 20:36)
Interesting approach, though I felt the acting was giving too much away (isn't he supposed to be realistic? He seemed somewhat simple here)
Shaun Bond (Tuesday, 13 November 2012 22:02)
Agree with the producer's notes about the 'beautiful' lines, at that point they confuse and don't really add anything to the story. I would also end it on the tear falling as this, I feel, would have the best impact and end it on an emotional beat. Well done, it was a clear interpretation of the script and enjoyable.
James Lloyd (Saturday, 17 November 2012 02:14)
Oh my god. It's spelled LOSE people!
Good film. Well shot.