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• #1

  Mark (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 19:51)

  The opening is to long What we need to know is its cheaper to go in as couples. The bit where she worries about her teeth adds to the story and his worry about asking her. The music at the beginning is unneccesary at least make it quieter as it doesnt seem to serve a purpose other than to try to force an enjoyment of the music rather than the drama. So be more confident in believing the story can hold its own. The ending was quite funny and caught me off guard. So well done.

• #2

  Evan (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 21:14)

  Very cute. Performances had the right balance to make it feel genuine and still funny. Lots of room to tighten up the edit. We all get what he's planning to do so no need to prolong that. Get inside quicker and give us the gag.

• #3

  Susie Shircliff (Tuesday, 06 November 2012 22:05)

  I agree with the other critiques. I think that you could have a stellar short too if you synched up the audio better. The kiss and some of the lines weren't in synch for me (I don't know if it was the way it was compressed, but the way it played- the audio was delayed slightly that it was distracting).
  
  Great job! Your actors were very genuine and I liked your shots.
  

• #4

  Stephen Cooper (Wednesday, 07 November 2012 23:07)

  Would trim the beginning and cut a fair few of the shots shorter to increase the pace and get to the gag.